No Unnecessary Additives or Fillers

Today we're going to talk about slimming down. No, not dieting. Are you kidding? After what I've eaten this weekend? No, even I'm not that masochistic. Today, loves, we're going to talk about how to manage the waistline of your writing. I know a lot of us are always focused on word count. What is industry standard on this? Did I make the mark for NaNo? That kind of thing. But there comes a time when you need to cut words with reckless abandon.

My personal motto is "write fearlessly, edit ruthlessly". When I'm working on a rough draft, wordcount be damned, I'm going to tell the story. Sometimes, this means I come up shorter than industry standard. I don't care. "Tell the damn story" is my mantra when hammering out a rough draft. Period. Then we get to editing. And that is where we, as writers, need to exercise a little portion control on behalf of our manuscripts.
Literary agent Meredith Barnes tweeted the other day: "'Suddenly is a horrible word. If you cut 'suddenly' out of a sentence the sudden thing happens one word *more* suddenly for the reader!" Now, when drafting and editing, I'm careful about adverbs. They have their place, but, like any diet we must remember moderation. So, just to have fun, after reading Ms. Barnes' tweet I went through one of my manuscripts and did a find all for a few words I loathe. Here's what I found in my 82,000 word manuscript:
Usually = 9
Suddenly = 14
Really = 43
Only = 79
Just = 265
That* = 917
*One of my Attack Fish begged me that if I loved her at all I would add "that" to my list of search and destroy. Because I do, I did. 
 
Use sparingly no matter what School House Rock says.

Holy crap, 79 instances of "only"? I hate that word! 265 uses of "just"? And yeah, there's so much "that" in my manuscript I need to serve it with a bag of chips. So, I did what any crash dieter does: WORK. I went through the manuscript and evaluated each use on a case by case basis. Sometimes, those words are necessary for flow or because it's what this character would say. Doing self-edits like this can be precarious as you try to balance good form with character voice, rhythm and scene structure with flowing prose. I discovered, though, that this further tightened the screws on an already solid manuscript. I found that some sentences where just victims of shitty construction. Remove that word, re-tweak the phrasing and voila! Shiny new (and better) sentence, and therefore a better novel.

After merciless line edits, I cut the filler down to something like this:
Usually = 1
Suddenly = 0
Really = 20
Only = 19
Just = 127
That = 447
And ya know what? Most of those decisions weren't difficult. Yes, my overall wordcount shrunk, but the manuscript is that much cleaner. There was no question when a word needed to go. I even found other problems in the nearby lines that I was able to tweak, so overall, this was a terrific exercise. (Or exorcism. Whatever.)

You have to make these decisions and you have to be ruthless with yourself. Yes, self-editing can be difficult and time-consuming, but it's worth it. Not only that, you need to do it. If you want any sort of career, you must be open to criticism and suggestions where cuts are concerned. But you probably knew that already. The other thing you need, though, is a confidence in your work that is not self-deluded. You need to be able to trust yourself to know what's best for your manuscript. If an agent or editor asks you to do something against your "vision" you need to be able to back it up and fight for that decision with more than, "because I say so". Self-editing without coddling your "muse" is one of the ways to build up that skill.

I know that writers, especially those newer to the game, worry about cuts and editing. We've all heard the chestnut about "killing your darlings". Just as we have to write from a place of truth, we have to be honest with ourselves when we edit. Are you keeping something in because the story demands it, or because you like it? Is it fluff or is that a load-bearing wall? Is this sentence full of meaty exposition or empty calories?